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| metrotimes, bars, rent, humour, floyd anderson (ii), rock/pop, community, poems, how i met your mother television show, requiem for a dream, church, slovenia, actors, m, puff, jack straw., concerts, insult, savage love, bill hanrahan, sales, review, commentary, | your review is so chock full of internet popularized catchphrases anyway. sheep Submitted by neoncoathanger <megangiles.at.olp.net> at 2004-04-19 19:22:10 (#) Ranking: -2 Okay, I must say teen I agree with c-rock on this one. Insane, reading your story is like being trapped in a seventh-grade poetry club. You're trying so hard to be dark and disturbing that you wind up sounding like a twelve year old teen drama queen. Hell, even the name you chose for yourself reeks of pre-teen female. Can the shock factor, quit trying to depress everybody and passing it off as talent, and write teen something with a little more motivation. Think it out a little more, will you? Trying to cram eight thousand plot twists into so short a story is moronic. |
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| I've got a talented tongue too, btw. jack straw. Submitted by PeopleAreStrange (user info) at 2004-05-02 21:24:12 (#) Ranking: 2 I'm so glad you got onto BAW Michael, I only just found out. I really liked this story when I read it...you're a very talented guy. Submitted by Insanethemind (user info) at 2004-04-28 02:01:29 (#) Ranking: 0 please reference another copy of it then, idiot Submitted by Malachewaii (user info) at 2004-04-27 15:03:37 (#) Ranking: -2 This story is so old.. jack straw. don't tell me you're pawning it off as your own. Submitted by Insanethemind (user jack straw. info) at 2004-04-24 15:46:46 (#) Ranking: 0 i'm touched by your kindhearted criticism, neoncoathanger. now go fuck yourself 'insanethemind' is a song lyric, and trust me i am not an angst ridden teen. |
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